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Old 08-01-2009, 01:06 PM   #1
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Default [Song]Hold You Close

This is a song that I wrote for my girlfriend now ex.

erse 1
It's been so long
Since I've seen your elegance
To feel your embrace
Would keep me strong

Since the day's dawning
I get a wonderful feeeling
When I Think of seeing you

I can't wait until I hold
your frivolous body
and receive your warm glow
from the love that we share

Chorus
Baby I'm going crazy
Cause I want to be with you
To hold you close and
feel your warmth again
And it erases the pain

Verse 2
So for a while
Your beauty slipped out of my mind
And I feel guilty
Losing myself

Since the day's dawning
I get a wonderful feeeling
When I Think of seeing you

I can't wait until I hold
your frivolous body
and receive your warm glow
from the love that we share

Chorus
Baby I'm going crazy
Cause I want to be with you
To hold you close and
feel your warmth again
And it erases the pain
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Old 08-01-2009, 02:22 PM   #2
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It's written nicely, but I'd love to see some of your songs that aren't centered around teen angst and love.
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Old 08-01-2009, 11:02 PM   #3
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Nicely done. I like it, its very sweet. Gets down to the point ^-^
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Old 08-02-2009, 11:25 PM   #4
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Thanks!




@Cim, this is actually my first official song that I've written. Look for more in the future!
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Old 08-14-2009, 08:54 PM   #5
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Ah, very good! I can't write songs at all.

It's written quite nicely. c: And It's a very sweet song. [Wow. So I just took Cim's comment and Chiikimono's comment and put them together? Lame.] But really. Nice job. ^^
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Old 08-17-2009, 12:22 PM   #6
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It's so beautiful that *sniff* it makes me feel like you're singing that about me.
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